Evaluation of 'The White Room' re-make

We re-made a 30 second clip of 'The White Room' which was a horror film made by previous media students. We analysed the video and noted the shots, angles and effects used on the video.
When re-creating the video we found a location similar to the one used in the original film with white walls to ensure that we had a similar effect, we also used a tripod to make sure that all our shots and camera movements were steady.
We opened with a long shot to establish the scene, this shows the character involved and the setting for the clip. This was then followed by a Tilt upwards as the character moves to stand up, this is to ensure that she stays in shot and that there is a sufficient amount of head room. We then switched to a medium shot of the girls arms to show the writing on them - we had made sure that the make up and costumes where similar to those used in the original film - and then used a close up on her hands. We decided against using a zoom because they had not used this in the original film and it can make the film look very unprofessional and badly edited. We used an extreme close up on her eyes as they did in the original film this shows the characters emotions well and adds to the tension and fear of the clip. In the original film a clip of blood being splattered on a wall was shown, we used tomato ketchup to give the effect of blood however after filming we realised this was not very effective and didn't look very realistic so if using blood in our film we would have to try and make some of our own.
we put an effect on the clip to make the shots seem a lot brighter and it also made them slightly out of focus, we also added a letterbox effect to the extreme close up of the eyes, looking back on this  i think i would not use it because it ruins the continuity of the film and doesn't fit with the 'horror' genre of the film.
Looking back on our clip i can see it includes a few continuity errors such as at some points in the film our actor is in a different position than she was in the shot before and at one point she looks into the camera.
In my final film i will make sure that the film has continuity throughout and that the editing and music all fit in with the genre of the film.